A Fragment #1

We share a space,

the remains of dead stars

created you and I.

Our mass tangles like silk strings

blown by the wind

and all at once

neither you nor I

exist–

effaced and erased

our bodies become a singularity.

We are elemental,

made up of symbols from

the periodic table,

our atoms are essentially

the same.

 

My poetry and writing friends…I need your help on this one.  It doesn’t feel finished but I’m not sure where to go next.  Any suggestions?  I would love some deep and thick criticism…

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